Ok. I'm not an expert, but I've been spending a lot of time the past two months going through Shawn Clement's videos. Since they represent my new target swing, I have three comments relative to what I learned in those videos.
1. Grip. The thumb on your right hand is right on top of the club. More like a putting grip. I don't see how you can get the club to rest in the crook of your right index finger when you get to the top of your backswing so the stability of the club on the downswing, and the available power, may come into question. Check out Shawn's videos on the grip.
2. Your head is in front of the ball rather than behind it so I don't really see a tilt. You seem pretty upright to me.
3. Hard to tell in the video and i tried to stop it a few times to see for sure, but I think you're not giving full extension toward the hole after hitting the ball.
Shawn's videos are amazing. he has about 100 of them on his site. Check out a few of them.